An unexpected turn

Another Red Dress club post for your entertainment.  This week’s prompt asked us to write a piece – fiction or non-fiction – in which we or our character take a detour.  I think you’ll enjoy this work of, um, fiction. YES, it’s fiction. AHEM.

Ethan promised to take her out for dinner and drinks. He made sure she understood he intended to stay over. Roommates, out of town visitors, work and missed connections had kept them from having many nights alone. Tonight was going to be different.

Seated in the dark restaurant, words slowly started to fall from their lips as they found their comfort level with each other.

Plates came and went. Glasses were filled and refilled. The heat was palpable. Not one to play coy, Mandy reached out to rub his leg with her foot, feeling silly and sexy.

And what is that? Is someone feeling a little bold? You wouldn’t be anxious to leave, would you?

Teasing her, Ethan ordered a couple more glasses of wine.

Mmmm, Ethan this tiramisu is delicious, you sure you don’t want a bite? Mandy let her lips linger on the spoon, savoring the sweet smoothness of the dessert. Two can play this game, she thought.

Throwing a few bills on the table, Ethan pulled the giggling Mandy from her seat, out of the restaurant and up the street to her apartment.

Before she could get through the door, Ethan was all over her, kissing her neck, unbuttoning her shirt. Laughing at his impatience, Mandy pulled him inside, wrestling a hand free to secure the lock. They stumbled toward the bedroom, drunk on wine and desire.

Mandy shimmied out of her offensive jeans as Ethan pulled her on his lap, continuing his assault on her neck with his lips. Hands were everywhere, hair being pulled, limbs being pushed aside, each of them trying to position the other in order to make their move.

Ethan was able to grasp both of Mandy’s wrists and with a twist, turned her over his knee. Before she could gather her wits, she felt the sting of Ethan’s hand across her ass.

Ow! What the…OW.

More slaps came in quick succession. Mandy started to writhe and fight.

Stop squirming!

His voice snapped Mandy out of her fear. Chortling and snorting, yet trying to hold back the snickers, she shook and wiggled in his lap.

Stop squirming, you ornery woman!

Uncontrollable laughter sent Mandy to the floor.

Frustrated by her giggling, desperate to find the heat again, Ethan pulled her back on to his lap to kiss away the laughter.

Mandy, this giggling of yours is only going to make it hurt more. You’re not a naughty girl, now are you?

More laughter, more trying to stifle the laughter.

Mandy was curious where this turn in their sex life may take them, amazed by her usually staid partner and surprised at the excitement stirring within her. Reaching up to kiss Ethan, she assured him she would play along and threw herself back over his lap, with a shake of her backside.

Good girl.


As always, concrit and adoration is welcome. I hope you enjoyed this as much as I did. And thank you CDG of Move Over Mary Poppins for your influence!

23 Responses to An unexpected turn
  1. CDG
    March 18, 2011 | 1:09 pm


    I’ve said it before, and I’ll say it again. Funny is sexy, and sex is funny.

    I love it. I love you.

    And I already gave you plenty of concrit in private… ::brow waggle::
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  2. Kelly K @ Writing with Chaos
    March 18, 2011 | 1:24 pm

    Ohhh…. naughty little Mandy. Not what I was expecting (says the woman who wrote about hair yak testicles).

    I was a little concerned at first, until the laughter started. The transition between fear and laughter was a little muddled, but the characters enjoyment in one another was fun to read.

    It was fun to read something totally different from you, oh mighty brainstorming woman. Thanks for the peek into your head. ;)
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  3. cristina
    March 18, 2011 | 2:36 pm

    oh my goodness, I am cracking up. This was such a fun read!
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  4. tulpen
    March 18, 2011 | 3:02 pm

    Spanking is the fucking BEST!
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  5. mommakiss
    March 18, 2011 | 4:09 pm

    Hot jeans. Ass smacking. This is soooooo non-fiction.
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  6. Shell
    March 18, 2011 | 4:22 pm

    I’m with Mama Kiss!


  7. Leighann
    March 18, 2011 | 4:42 pm

    Sweet Jesus I need a drink and a fan.
    That was hot
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  8. Renee
    March 18, 2011 | 6:12 pm

    I have to say, I was concerned for Mandy.

    Wow, good writing there!
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  9. Jessica
    March 18, 2011 | 6:44 pm

    You crazy lady, this is great! How fun. I was going to ask how you can come up with such a story but I don’t want to know. ;)
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  10. Coffeypot
    March 18, 2011 | 7:06 pm

    The lucky bastard. I tried that once and she grabbed my nuts and squeezed so hard I was screaming like a girl in a spook house.
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    Jack@TheJackB Reply:

    Everyone knows to be wary of the ornery woman’s wandering hands. ;)
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  11. Cheryl @ Mommypants
    March 18, 2011 | 7:20 pm

    Fiction my ass!

    So to speak…


  12. tracy
    March 18, 2011 | 8:23 pm

    HOT – Love it. Need more. .and a cold shower.
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  13. The Drama Mama
    March 18, 2011 | 11:56 pm

    Ha! I love it. I fully enjoyed the light and fun tone, the naughtiness of this piece. Why was she afraid at first though? That was a bit muddled for me.

    I really really really enjoyed this piece though.
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  14. varunner7
    March 19, 2011 | 3:49 am

    Okay, I really wasn’t expecting the spanking! Now that’s a detour!
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  15. Galit Breen
    March 19, 2011 | 10:05 am

    Hot with a hint of non-fiction, perhaps?! :)


  16. Kris
    March 19, 2011 | 4:21 pm

    THAT was a surprise! Fantastic.
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  17. jaime
    March 19, 2011 | 5:07 pm

    fiction, huh?

    i’m not so sure about that one ;)
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  18. Sandra
    March 19, 2011 | 9:12 pm

    This read a little to much like reality to me…and all I can say to that, is “Oh my!”
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  19. Pamela
    March 20, 2011 | 9:09 am

    Oh this is sexy-funny-delicious! I want more smut from you. More!!


  20. Amy
    March 20, 2011 | 1:19 pm

    Suuuuuuuuuuuure this was fiction! Who are you trying to fool? ;)

    Great detour! Now I need a cold shower! Whew!
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  21. Sara
    March 20, 2011 | 8:13 pm

    BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA. You naughty naughty girl! I don’t think I could have contained the laughter any better! HAHAHA
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  22. Frelle
    March 21, 2011 | 9:46 am

    that was an unexpected detour! what a great take on the prompt! *brow waggle* indeed!
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